tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post6964546759444608590..comments2024-03-19T05:26:04.770-04:00Comments on A Year of Reading: Poetry Friday -- HawkuMary Leehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-42532991314653639222012-07-30T13:46:48.146-04:002012-07-30T13:46:48.146-04:00It's as wonderful now as the first time I read...It's as wonderful now as the first time I read it... the structure and word choice is amazing!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06549453373381775445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-22003545942912712672012-07-30T13:12:22.065-04:002012-07-30T13:12:22.065-04:00Thank you, Mary Lee. It is a gift every time I rea...Thank you, Mary Lee. It is a gift every time I read it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12196660150875214481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-65753198813930937592012-07-29T23:25:59.723-04:002012-07-29T23:25:59.723-04:00Great title, great poem!Great title, great poem!Douglas Florianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16128165816863246403noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-51444667053532691892012-07-27T23:56:20.411-04:002012-07-27T23:56:20.411-04:00You amaze...You amaze...Patrick A. Allenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18098594501502756880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-23548261522954885302012-07-27T21:35:50.749-04:002012-07-27T21:35:50.749-04:00You have certainly captured some wonderful moments...You have certainly captured some wonderful moments here. Fascinating to observe these hawks as you have and to wonder if they notice you as well. Thanks for some great reading.Betsy Hubbardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10492340502962987362noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-63050099162746019362012-07-27T21:00:49.910-04:002012-07-27T21:00:49.910-04:00ABSOLUTELY AMAZINGLY AWESOME!!!ABSOLUTELY AMAZINGLY AWESOME!!!Martha Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17380456304172356544noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-64151189111153274802012-07-27T20:35:52.622-04:002012-07-27T20:35:52.622-04:00Wonderful, Mary Lee. I love Violet's form &am...Wonderful, Mary Lee. I love Violet's form & you added much to it as well with the 'acts' and the title 'hawku'. I can imagine your grief & worry over the fallen nest. We have kestrels raise babies each year, & one year a baby seemed week & while we tried, could not save it. I have pictures of it nestled down by a shrub, & we knew it wouldn't last the night. Your beautiful words brought this all back. Thank you!Linda Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14983144542632353870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-67663598871938784502012-07-27T14:17:18.730-04:002012-07-27T14:17:18.730-04:00This is wonderful! The haikus, the picking up of w...This is wonderful! The haikus, the picking up of words in the first poem, a hawk story, and the excellent name "Hawku." I love your ending--I like how you bring the story into the possibility of the reader's own reality.Karin Fisher-Goltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10180838581250572921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-2898847753670639932012-07-27T14:01:24.019-04:002012-07-27T14:01:24.019-04:00This is really cool. Sort of an acrostic on steroi...This is really cool. Sort of an acrostic on steroids. Thanks for sharing! -EdEd DeCariahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02008811161729435126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-10613084899951933072012-07-27T13:41:49.512-04:002012-07-27T13:41:49.512-04:00I'm relieved the babies survived! I love "...I'm relieved the babies survived! I love "hawku" -- "haiku" lends itself so well to play. I can imagine this story in a picture book. What do you think?Tabathahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14367572663591077922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-70176701406467715902012-07-27T12:48:09.580-04:002012-07-27T12:48:09.580-04:00Hi, Mary Lee. The pignut hickory got me, too. This...Hi, Mary Lee. The pignut hickory got me, too. This is a wonderful way to tell a story in short scenes. I have a local friend, poet Kay Weeks, who uses senryu series to journal on her blog.<br /><br />We have redtail hawks in our neighborhood. I'll have to send you my Hawk Ode -- written to a young hawk who visited us on a snowy day.Author Amokhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13636391982938592789noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-68056932831479872422012-07-27T10:52:40.201-04:002012-07-27T10:52:40.201-04:00Mary Lee,
Well done, Mary Lee! I love your poem a...Mary Lee,<br /><br />Well done, Mary Lee! I love your poem and your story about the hawks.Elaine Magliarohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09829330276633865868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-42164486164854646482012-07-27T09:15:55.622-04:002012-07-27T09:15:55.622-04:00In our neighborhood we get hawks, falcons, and onc...In our neighborhood we get hawks, falcons, and once even a bald eagle at the bust stop. I love listening to their "[w]histling and screeing" and watching their "piercing dives through tree branches". <br />Your extended haiku is really beautiful.Katyahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14618886866798905292noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-11541437360782069222012-07-27T08:47:30.328-04:002012-07-27T08:47:30.328-04:00Fabulous, Mary Lee! As a sometimes birder myself, ...Fabulous, Mary Lee! As a sometimes birder myself, I can so appreciate your involvement with that hawk. I loved the photos, alerting me to the reality of it all. Nice last stanza *grin.* I'm with Diane and her partiality to the "Whistling and screeing" lines. What a great word - 'screeing'! (And thanks for the kind mention :)<br /><br /><a href="http://vnesdolypoems.wordpress.com" rel="nofollow">Violet</a>Violet N.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16586574800230604652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-27866350626043320982012-07-27T07:51:03.225-04:002012-07-27T07:51:03.225-04:00Whistling and screeing,
piercing dives through tre...Whistling and screeing,<br />piercing dives through tree branches,<br />perching on our fence. <br /><br />This is my favorite stanza--it is so noisy and filled with action! I enjoyed your explanations of the extended haiku form. Nice job!Diane Mayrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09767689319000732296noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-4025311116917512942012-07-27T07:49:52.973-04:002012-07-27T07:49:52.973-04:00What a privilege to share in this creatively rende...What a privilege to share in this creatively rendered story, Mary Lee. Amazing survival skills. We frequently have red-shouldered hawks and a red-tailed hawk or two on our (their?!) property, and lately I've seen and heard a broad-winged hawk too. Magnificent creatures. <br /><br />(Continued thoughts for your neighbors in the loss of their home.)Robyn Hood Blackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07279289715664168026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-75721598919866166962012-07-27T06:58:26.523-04:002012-07-27T06:58:26.523-04:00This is terrific, Mary Lee. Thank you for telling ...This is terrific, Mary Lee. Thank you for telling us the story behind it (I had seen part but not all of it on FB) and for sharing the mini-lesson and the idea of the extended haiku. What a fun challenge! I am going to want to try this one soon!<br /><br />I esp love the detail of the pignut hickory and this:<br /><br />Hawks in the city <br />remind us we are not far <br />from the wild. Ever.laurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20429083.post-11513967702550172512012-07-27T06:49:45.845-04:002012-07-27T06:49:45.845-04:00Oh, I love that "pignut hickory"!Oh, I love that "pignut hickory"!Julie https://www.blogger.com/profile/12811523890920763782noreply@blogger.com