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In the Early Morning Dark, In the Fall
I step out onto the front porch
thinking it must still be raining,
but the steady patter I hear
is the oak being deconstructed
by a light breeze.
© Mary Lee Hahn, 2014
Cathy has the Poetry Friday Roundup at Merely Day by Day.
I think I might create a list of all the wonderful poems about leaves, and now you've added another, Mary Lee. It has that undercurrent of sadness I feel in the autumn, although I love the season too.
ReplyDeleteIt's hard not to think of poems as leaves swirl around us like words. Thanks for sharing, Mary Lee!
ReplyDeleteI love this, Mary Lee! "the oak being deconstructed" is exactly right.
ReplyDeleteYour poem perfectly describes the sensation I had Thursday morning. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteExactly. The wind blows and I check the window for rain. I love "the oak being deconstructed" too.
ReplyDeleteLovely words, lovely images.
ReplyDeleteLove this, Mary Lee. Among the many things a change of seasons brings is another set of sounds, odd to our summer ears: the leaves' decent through the tree, the sudden silence of crickets, a quick wind through bare branches. Your poem helped me hear these. Many thanks!
ReplyDeleteThis is a gem, Mary Lee.
ReplyDeleteLovely, Mary Lee! And the next sound you hear is the crunch, crunch, crunch of the your footsteps through the "deconstruction". =)
ReplyDeletethe oak being deconstructed
ReplyDelete- I will think of this on my next acorn strewn walk.
I didn't expect the word deconstruct. You have me thinking about how just one word can create images and cause thinking. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteOak being deconstructed.... Love these words, this image....this unexpected twist
ReplyDeleteDesconstructed evokes such a powerful image here Mary Lee. Beautiful words.
ReplyDeleteYou are a word smith. Every time I stop by I am reminded of this very fact. I could read this again and again.
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Like several others, I'm totally surprised by the use of the word "deconstructed." So perfect! I agree with Cathy- you are a wordsmith.
ReplyDeleteI love the use of patter in an unexpected way...fall is here.
ReplyDeleteJust lovely.
ReplyDeleteI really like this!
ReplyDeleteWell said, Mary Lee!
ReplyDeleteOh my, the image of the oak being deconstructed by a light breeze just struck me. I suppose its the contrast of the image of deconstruction and light breeze that just made me stop and take it in.
ReplyDeleteWonderful! You've captured it exactly!
ReplyDeleteIt's been raining leaves here all weekend--love how you've captured the leaf fall and the unexpected breeze deconstructing!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! THis is one of my favorite sounds of autumn:>)
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