Friday, October 24, 2014

In the Early Morning Dark, In the Fall

Flickr Creative Commons Photo by Graham and Sheila


In the Early Morning Dark, In the Fall

I step out onto the front porch
thinking it must still be raining,
but the steady patter I hear
is the oak being deconstructed
by a light breeze.

© Mary Lee Hahn, 2014



Cathy has the Poetry Friday Roundup at Merely Day by Day.


23 comments:

  1. I think I might create a list of all the wonderful poems about leaves, and now you've added another, Mary Lee. It has that undercurrent of sadness I feel in the autumn, although I love the season too.

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  2. It's hard not to think of poems as leaves swirl around us like words. Thanks for sharing, Mary Lee!

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  3. I love this, Mary Lee! "the oak being deconstructed" is exactly right.

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  4. Your poem perfectly describes the sensation I had Thursday morning. Lovely!

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  5. Exactly. The wind blows and I check the window for rain. I love "the oak being deconstructed" too.

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  6. Lovely words, lovely images.

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  7. Love this, Mary Lee. Among the many things a change of seasons brings is another set of sounds, odd to our summer ears: the leaves' decent through the tree, the sudden silence of crickets, a quick wind through bare branches. Your poem helped me hear these. Many thanks!

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  8. Lovely, Mary Lee! And the next sound you hear is the crunch, crunch, crunch of the your footsteps through the "deconstruction". =)

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  9. the oak being deconstructed
    - I will think of this on my next acorn strewn walk.

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  10. I didn't expect the word deconstruct. You have me thinking about how just one word can create images and cause thinking. Thank you.

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  11. Oak being deconstructed.... Love these words, this image....this unexpected twist

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  12. Desconstructed evokes such a powerful image here Mary Lee. Beautiful words.

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  13. You are a word smith. Every time I stop by I am reminded of this very fact. I could read this again and again.

    Cathy

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  14. Like several others, I'm totally surprised by the use of the word "deconstructed." So perfect! I agree with Cathy- you are a wordsmith.

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  15. I love the use of patter in an unexpected way...fall is here.

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  16. I really like this!

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  17. Oh my, the image of the oak being deconstructed by a light breeze just struck me. I suppose its the contrast of the image of deconstruction and light breeze that just made me stop and take it in.

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  18. Wonderful! You've captured it exactly!

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  19. It's been raining leaves here all weekend--love how you've captured the leaf fall and the unexpected breeze deconstructing!

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  20. Beautiful! THis is one of my favorite sounds of autumn:>)

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