Friday, February 19, 2016

Poetry Friday -- Simile-Metaphor-Vocabulary Poem

Photo by Mike Ratcliffe

There's pride --
(nothing wrong with pride)
a warm sense of self-worth
sitting quietly inside you
like a steaming cup of cocoa on a winter morning.

But then there's hubris --
a venti double mocha latte with whip and extra sprinkles
standing there beside your computer in the cafe
while you pose with your earbuds
open notebook
fancy pen
empty page.

The trick is knowing the difference.

©Mary Lee Hahn, 2016

This poem was written for Laura Shovan's Found Object Poem Project.

When I started writing, I had no idea how this poem would go with the skull and antlers. I had the phrase "There's ___, but then there's ____" in my mind and I started writing from that. Somehow my brain gave me pride and hubris. We've been noticing similes and metaphors in my 5th grade class, so I had fun making a simile-metaphor-vocabulary poem that will hopefully teach my students a new word. When I was finished, I looked back at the skull and wondered what HE knows about pride vs. hubris, sitting there on the sidewalk for all to see...

Donna Smith, reigning Queen of rhyme and wit, has the Poetry Friday roundup this week at Mainley Write.


  1. This is fantastic. It reminds me of Ted Kooser's words in THE POETRY HOME REPAIR MANUAL, "There are, in a sense, two poets, the one alone writing a poem and the one in the black turtleneck and beret, trying to look sexy." I adore your cup of cocoa, ML, and I am going to remember that image. See you later! xo

  2. I dub you the metaphor queen!

  3. Anonymous10:31 AM

    Very nice! Happy Friday!

  4. Love the poem (but is it terrible that now I'm coveting the mocha latte? Is it hubris if I drink it alone in my basement?)

  5. Not a coffee drinker, but I do love cocoa . . . and your metaphors.

  6. Interesting that you came up with this poem (and great metaphors) from this photo. Craving cocoa now, of course. :)

  7. I love the poems that I call "definition" poems--that teach you the word by drawing an image of the concept. These illustrations are so current, so recognizable to many of us! How will 5th graders respond, do you think?

  8. Wow, all that from antlers on the sidewalk?! Your poem (and thought process) is a delight, Mary Lee. Mmmm...cocoa.=)


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