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TIME
Time
in the desert
is as vast as the sky
expanding across blue distance.
Ancient as sand, changeless and thirsty,
time waits, encased in a monumental tomb of stone.
©Mary Lee Hahn, 2014
Stacking stones
all day and all night.
Just to make a pyramid
to store dead people.
This is all for naught.
But the Pharaoh wants it,
so he gets it.
©VS, 2014
This year, because April 1 is on a Tuesday, I am including my students in my writing process for this first week. Yesterday we looked at this picture of The Great Pyramid of Giza and did a two-column brainstorming activity with DENOTATION on the left and CONNOTATION on the right. Denotation is where we listed the exactly what we could see in the picture, or facts we gathered from further research. Connotation is where we listed what those facts made us think about, or feel. My denotations were big, old, triangle, sand, desert, brown. My connotations were important, valuable, knowledgeable, solid, balanced, sturdy, strong, classic, time, change, changelessness, vast, empty, silent, dry, hot, thirsty. You can see which ones made it into my poem!
It was fascinating to watch the students' writing move immediately in unique directions based on their own connotations. After 5 minutes of my own writing, I circled the room and found another pyramid-shaped poem, two acrostics (mummy and pyramid), three different voices (a slave, the pyramid, and a conversation between the pyramid and a visitor), and poems about the sand, grave robbers, and oldness. I hope a couple of them will allow me to post their poems here later today!
And (drumroll...) I am cross-posting my Poetry Month posts on my spankin' new poetry website!
Carol's pyramid poem is at Carol's Corner; Kevin's is at Kevin's Meandering Mind.
Very cool - I love the division of ideas first, and then the interplay. Totally "stealing" this idea, Mary Lee!
ReplyDeletePS - Love the website, too - I seem to have missed so much during the March SOL challenge.
I love this Denotation/Connotation exercise! (Note: have you read Laura Purdie Salas's Giza pyramid poem in The PFA for Science? Your students will like it!)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Tara and Janet - I love the denotation/connotation activity. I love this line from your poem: "Ancient as sand, changeless and thirsty..." I will be checking out your new website!
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing the 'how' Mary Lee. When I see the pyramids I always think of the people/slaves who toiled in the building of it, hard to imagine that they accomplished this amazing thing. Will go check your new poetry site!
ReplyDeleteI'm so excited you share your learning with your students. This has always been a difficult lesson for me to teach. Like Tara, I am borrowing everything.
ReplyDeleteThis is terrific, Mary Lee! I love "as vast as the blue sky." I'm heading to your new website now!
ReplyDeleteOK, I gave it a shot…
ReplyDelete“How to Build a Pyramid”
So you wish
to link heaven and earth?
First you will need workers,
about one hundred thousand
no, not slaves,
instead use farmers
from the Nile floodplain
the great river
spills its banks
from July to October
and the farmers will be glad
to set stone
in exchange
for sustenance
And then you will need stone
two million
limestone blocks
Five thousand pounds each
extracted from quarries
floated across rivers
dragged over deserts
slid on sledges
up slippery
clay-coated ramps
one stone
set in place
every two minutes
for ten or twenty years
‘til you have
the world’s tallest structure
surely high enough
for the great Khufu
to grab for a little favor
from the gods on high?
© Carol Wilcox, 2014
P.S. Not sure why it did the weird spacing thing
ReplyDeletePPS I love the new website!!!
I thought I left a comment here yesterday morning, but maybe it never "took."
ReplyDeletewonders:
the world unfolding;
overlapping architects
weave ideas from strands of silk,
composed of words, image, sound
while designers of this flowing media fabric
add unexpected edges and rich unknown colors
which we work to wrap around ourselves
sheltered in the experience of the past;
overlapping dreamers in
the world unfolding;
wonders.
But you are better off seeing the poem:
http://dogtrax.edublogs.org/2014/04/01/poems-for-april-wonder/
Kevin